Illustrative example — not a real client flyer
GREENFIELD
COMMUNITY TRUST
stock beach photograph
COMMUNITY EVENT
Join us for a morning of community spirit on Saturday 14th at 10am,
meeting by the car park at the north end of the beach, and please do
bring your own gloves as we have a limited supply available on the day.
www.greenfieldcommunitytrust.org.uk
critique.md
Verdict
The photograph is doing real work and nothing else is. A stranger walking
past learns that an organisation exists and that community is involved —
not what's happening, or when.
What I got in three seconds
A beach, an organisation logo, and the words “community event”. Not what
the event is, not when, not where.
Fix first
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The headline says nothing — “COMMUNITY EVENT” is a
category, not an invitation.
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Replace it with the thing itself: “BEACH CLEAN-UP” at the same size or
larger, neighbourhood name under it.
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The date and location are buried in prose — nobody
scanning a noticeboard parses a 42-word paragraph.
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Pull date, start time and meeting point out as three stacked lines at
roughly 24–28 pt, directly under the headline.
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No call to action — it never says what to do.
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One line at the bottom: “Just turn up — or register at [URL]”, 14 pt
minimum, QR code beside it.
Worth fixing
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The photograph says nothing specific — a stock beach
could illustrate a hundred different events, so it fills the top third
without narrowing anything down.
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Keep it only once the headline names the event; better still, crop to
people actually clearing a beach.
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The logo is the largest element — it outranks the date,
which is the second most important thing on the page.
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Drop it to a footer lockup, roughly a quarter of its current width.
What's working
The photograph is well cropped and the horizon sits off-centre, so the eye
travels down into the layout rather than off the edge. Keep it — it's the
only element earning its space.
Missing information
End time · whether children can come · accessibility of the meeting point ·
what happens if it rains